hockeymaster17
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 |  Subject: Suzaku "the dragon"  Sun Sep 09, 2007 8:54 pm | |
| Name Suzaku "the Dragon" Ichigaku
age 21
bloodline dyagogon
hair color black
eye color red blue grey brown yellow purple colorless(changes on mood)
hair black
appearance
village cloud
objective revive the cyarogon clan
history
when someone from the cyarogon clan is born a dragon is put into the blood of the baby but Suzaku had the King Dragon it gave him a new name
by age 3 he was able to destry a village called kakougyitsu easily
To be continued...
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Teague
Puppeteer/S-Rank Criminal
Posts : 23
Join date : 2007-08-22
| | Subject: Re: Suzaku "the dragon" Mon Sep 10, 2007 1:49 am | |
| I see so many things I am not happy about... | |
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Zetsu
Posts : 12
Join date : 2007-08-22
| | Subject: Re: Suzaku "the dragon" Mon Sep 10, 2007 2:53 pm | |
| No. Just no. history must be at LEAST 300 words and no ??? | |
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Skarr
Admin
Posts : 84
Join date : 2007-08-22
| | Subject: Re: Suzaku "the dragon" Tue Sep 11, 2007 7:02 pm | |
| - hockeymaster17 wrote:
- Name Suzaku "the Dragon" Ichigaku -Allowed
age ??? - You'l need to have an age or at least an age range
bloodline dyagogon - For us to approve this you'l have to explain it
hair color ??? - ??? answers aren't greatly looked upon
eye color red blue grey brown yellow purple colorless(changes on mood) - If this is to be a part of your character, tell us what color means what and why he does this
hair black
appearance ??? - Ya gotta have something here
village cloud
objective revive the cyarogon clan - Let's try being a bit more original
history
when someone from the cyarogon clan is born a dragon is put into the blood of the baby but Suzaku had the King Dragon it gave him a new name - Not really liking the looks of this. If you must, add a clan history for this
by age 3 he was able to destry a village called kakougyitsu easily - No! Not everyone is gonna be some majorly powerful monster straight from the start. Overall, just try making it a bit more extensive
To be continued... | |
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Teague
Puppeteer/S-Rank Criminal
Posts : 23
Join date : 2007-08-22
| | Subject: Re: Suzaku "the dragon" Tue Sep 11, 2007 7:07 pm | |
| - Skarr wrote:
- hockeymaster17 wrote:
- Name Suzaku "the Dragon" Ichigaku -Allowed
age ??? - You'l need to have an age or at least an age range
bloodline dyagogon - For us to approve this you'l have to explain it
hair color ??? - ??? answers aren't greatly looked upon
eye color red blue grey brown yellow purple colorless(changes on mood) - If this is to be a part of your character, tell us what color means what and why he does this
hair black
appearance ??? - Ya gotta have something here
village cloud
objective revive the cyarogon clan - Let's try being a bit more original
history
when someone from the cyarogon clan is born a dragon is put into the blood of the baby but Suzaku had the King Dragon it gave him a new name - Not really liking the looks of this. If you must, add a clan history for this
by age 3 he was able to destry a village called kakougyitsu easily - No! Not everyone is gonna be some majorly powerful monster straight from the start. Overall, just try making it a bit more extensive
To be continued... I agree Completly | |
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Zetsu
Posts : 12
Join date : 2007-08-22
| | Subject: Re: Suzaku "the dragon" Tue Sep 11, 2007 9:25 pm | |
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hockeymaster17
Posts : 2
Join date : 2007-09-09
Age : 29
| | Subject: Re: Suzaku "the dragon" Thu Sep 13, 2007 9:11 am | |
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Skarr
Admin
Posts : 84
Join date : 2007-08-22
| | Subject: Re: Suzaku "the dragon" Thu Sep 13, 2007 10:45 pm | |
| - hockeymaster17 wrote:
- im not done yet
We're simply letting you know what can and cannot be done before you get too far ahead with your story | |
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